2017年03月04日

the Japanese National Anthem

恒例(?)の Fruitful English の日記添削公開。今回は日本文化の紹介です。
*This blog entry has nothing to do with my personal beliefs.
You(= a cat) wrote :
I tried to answer the question;
What is the traditional music in Japan like?

あなた(= a cat)の作文
Every country has its own traditional music. Japanese people have a variety of musical instruments. For instance, "Wadaiko" is a Japanese big drum; "Shakuhachi" is a Japanese flute made of bamboo. These are still played at special events such as summer festivals and New Year's Celebrations.

Japanese traditional music also includes songs. I think the most famous song in Japan is the national anthem called "Kimigayo." Its distinctive character lies not in the music but in the lyrics. It is extremely short, simple and mystical because Japanese people appreciate the beauty of simplicity. It might be the shortest national anthem on the planet.

Although everyone in Japan knows the lyrics, which was written about 1,000 years ago, most of them do not know what it exactly means. Some say it is a battle hymn, others say it is just a love song. I am trying to translate it as precisely as possible.

The title of the song, "Kimigayo," literally means your era. The lyrics is as follows:
May your reign last for 1,000 years, 8,000 years.
Until pebbles merge into a boulder, covered with moss.
That's it! I believe this was made to admire the Emperor of ancient Japan. May your reign last forever!

添削結果
Every country has its own traditional music. Japanese people have a variety of musical instruments. For instance, "Wadaiko" is a (A)big (B)Japanese drum; "Shakuhachi" is a Japanese flute made of bamboo. These are still played at special events(C), such as summer festivals and New Year's (D)celebrations.

(E)Traditional Japanese music also includes songs. I think the most famous song in Japan is the national anthem(F), called "Kimigayo." Its distinctive character lies not in the music but in the lyrics. It is extremely short, simple and mystical because Japanese people appreciate the beauty of simplicity. It might be the shortest national anthem on the planet.

Although everyone in Japan knows the lyrics, which (G)were written about 1,000 years ago, most of them do not know what (H)they mean, exactly. Some say (I)the song is a battle hymn, (J)while others say it is just a love song. I am trying to translate it as precisely as possible.

The title of the song, "Kimigayo," literally means (K)"your era". The lyrics (L) are as follows:
May your reign last for 1,000 years, 8,000 years.
Until pebbles merge into a boulder, covered with moss.
That's it! I believe this was (M)written to admire the Emperor of ancient Japan. May your reign last forever!

評価
Lv4 ほとんどネイティブの書いた英文と同じレベルに達しています。
*評価は下がっても、コメントしてもらった方が学びは多い。

From T*****,
*やはりいつもの先生。他の先生たちはどこに行っちゃったんでしょうか!?

Hello there,
Wow, this was a great historical lesson for me! I knew the Japanese national anthem was short, but I had no idea what the lyrics meant - thank you!

We only needed to make very small adjustments here!
Adjectives can be tricky, but we try to place the most defining adjective closest to the noun, so "big Japanese drum" and "traditional Japanese music" are most natural.
*うーむ、コレはむずかしいにゃー......
Also, "lyrics" are countable, so we need to pluralize our conjugation for this word.
*"lyrics" は複数形だった!
Then, we can refer to the "song" or the "anthem" that was "written" for certain reasons - these are all natural expressions.
*あ〜コレは知ってた......けど忘れてた!

I hope this helps you - really terrific work!


*How beautiful and mystical it is!
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