2015年09月25日

Get out of your comfort zone

My teacher said to me, "Some teachers might say this essay is excellent, but you need to get out of your comfort zone. From now on, I'll ban using basic expressions such as first, second, and moreover."

After the feedback:
In my view, music is essential to our lives. Almost all cultures have their own music and musical instruments. The music industry makes billions of dollars worldwide every year; music is fun, and at the same time it has a positive effect on our lives.

First of all, music is a universal language. It is deeply connected with our emotions. Playing or listening to music can change our mood dramatically. When I am depressed, light and cheerful songs make me feel much better. Usually great movies come with great music. “Stand by me” has been unforgettable for us because of its theme song.

Its benefits, however, are not limited to emotionally. Music also enhances learning. It is scientifically proven that music encourages academic skills. Playing music uses many brain functions simultaneously. W. A. Mozart was not only a musical genius, but also a mathematical genius. Listening to baroque music improves the concentration and memory. As a result, students get higher grades.

Music also plays an important role in culture and society. It gives us a sense of unity. Singing together reminds us that we are not alone. “Koshien” high school baseball tournament is the biggest sport event in Japan. Before and after the game, spectators and players sing the school song together. They feel proud of their home team. Similarly at the Olympic Games, the national anthem is the highest reward in the competition.

In summary, music is extremely important for our lives. It effects our emotions, enhances brain function, and gives us a sense of unity. Without music I would die from loneliness. I cannot imagine a world without it.

Hello Teacher​ 英語教室
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